| Subject : Untitled Piece (Experiment) Author : Kevin Date : 8/21/2002 12:03:56 AM |
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UNTITLED PIECE Fatimah postulated on the prayer rug, seeking wisdom in the heart of God. The cruel words returned to her. The sinking feeling of her soul returned. 'Integrated'? What did the politicians mean? Speaking the language, wearing the attire, wanting to be part and parcel of society? Yes, she did all those things, wanted all those things, and more. It was hard for her heart to reconcile the present with the past, the ideas and ideals of her faith with the promise of a brave new world. Maybe, if she felt accepted, wanted, the change would be easier. Maybe she wouldn't feel the walls of isolation. --Why seek to mould your soul into a society where that society does not want you there?-- If 'integration' meant to forsake everything she believed in, her culture, her past, the heritage of her ancestors, she couldn't do that. Could any human being do that? The pressure from her parents was increasing: to conform to the old ways, to the Sharia law. Didn't the Prophet drink from the cup of milk, walking the middle path? Didn't some things have to change, to some degree, or die forever? What would have become of the Prophet if he had held fast to the laws of Ignorance? What glory shall be in the Future if one chooses to remain living in the past? She sought wisdom in the heart of God, and softly said --Ameen--. Question: What does everyone think of concept pieces? Like, poem cycle, song cycles, et cetera? Interesting, exciting, boring, repetitive....? |
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| Subject : Untitled Piece (Experiment) Author : sandy Date : 8/21/2002 2:58:00 AM |
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| hmm, I honestly don't know what to think either. I found it refreshing because the style is different and yet easy to follow, and yet at the same time, I almost fel that it would be better off as a short story instead. In fact I am almost positive you should rewrite it as a short story. I want to know more. |
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| Subject : Untitled Piece (Experiment) Author : Beth Date : 8/21/2002 9:42:12 PM |
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| Why untitled? Why not portray a concept? Could poems actually effect raising consciousness? YES, Tell me YES!I think this is a strong study of the subject and the reader cannot be ignorant after the read. It reminded me of a newspaper picture of one Muslim woman, still, sitting alone while the men in their dress made and spoke of the laws. A place where women still cannot vote or hold any office. :-( Thanks and you CAN come up with a great tile, I know. Peace, Beth | |
| Subject : Untitled Piece (Experiment) Author : Kevin Date : 8/22/2002 2:08:53 PM |
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Thank you all for your wonderful, encouraging comments. Whenever I wrote an experimental poem, my friends who read it say it should be a short story. I wrote a play a while back and a Muslim friend said she could see more as a short story. A British friend said she thought it (the play) was the opening of a novel. All of your suggestions have been taken, and I will work with it and see how it develops. Again, thank you all for your support and encouragement. |
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